My May Day holiday was nice. My family and another families went to a mountain together. We stayed for two days. My friends and I burned the sticks. It rained on the second day. But, the weather was hot and dry on the first day. My family's room was on the third floor. We watched TV in the hotel. We saw some movies. We bringed food to the hotel from our home. Because there was no food in the hotel. We made some dumplings. When I was making the dumplings, my mother took some pictures of me. There was many plants near the hotel. The hotel wasn't very big. My friends and I went walking at night.
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This sounds like a great holiday!
Great writing, Olly. Next time, try to add some time words. For example: On the first day we... The next day we... In the morning, we... then we... Later on, we... Time words help the reader understand the story.