Hi everyone! I'm preparing for the C1 Cambridge exam so I'm practicing writing. I would like you to assess this one, please. The exercise is about writing a proposal in 220-260 words. It requires suggesting hobbies of different types and giving reasons why you think they would make successful TV programmes for a national TV channel that is planning a serires of documentary programmes.
This is what I've written. I'd appreciate your feedback and corrections. Thank you :) (EVERYTHING FICTIONAL).
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In the era of social networks, streaming platforms and all kind of online entertainments, the TV still remains as one of the most appealing source of comunication. Among the wide variety of available programmes, documentary series are steadily becoming more popular.
An unusual hobby
The first idea I would like to highlight is about some people I have recently encountered with a weird and unusal interest for rare collections. One of them, is one of my neighbour who is a declared animalist. He owns in his house more than ten different uncommon animals; from colourful snakes to flamboyant birds. The documentary about this man will provide a very interesting point of view of someone really passionate about animals and biology. It will teach a lot regarding humans and animals interactions and how we can learn a lot from them.
Learning exotic languages
Not only English and French are among the languages learners’ favourite ones, but also languages such as Armenian, Swahili, or Icelandic are being learning by more people than we might think. A documentary series showing how these learners deal with such a difficult and challenging languages will provide quite useful methods and strategies to those who want to study a new language. For those who are not that interested in language learning, these programmes will also show inspirational people and cultures.
Conclusion
In my opinion, these ideas presented above, would fit in perfectly in today tendencies. Currently, the general audicence looks for something they have not seen yet, as well as something they can learn from.
I think you did a great job! (and that's coming from a professional editor:) Please let me know if you have any questions about my edits.
title: Writing Task for the Cambridge CAE Exam
@CocoPop thank you very much for your feedback. I really appreciate your comments and suggestions. As a non-native English speaker, I struggle a bit in making a text, I'd say, more natural and native-like. I'm trying to improve it. Thanks for your work on this.
My pleasure!))
Hey Alex, well done for your written production.
May I suggest to try this online app to assess the readability & intelligibility of your text : https://hemingwayapp.com/
. Worth a try (It helps me. I've written five books).