I wrote this title just for the meme but I think I can write a coherent post following it. It's really cold outside rn, though (for a life long hot country citizen, cold is 20 degrees). I don't know if I'll be able to endure this! Now that I mention it, I've always wondered: y'all who live in cold countries, what is considered cold and what is considered hot? I've lived all my life at 25-35 degrees, so something as mild as 20 degrees is cold for me. But I know there are countries that even reach negative numbers in winter. Is 20 degrees hot for you? What are your thoughts about living at 30 degrees all the time? (We don't have seasons here).
I can't help but think on an image where I'm freezing as hell while other person is melting.
But I don't want to change the topic of this post, so going back to evangelion. Who tf cares about evangelion? Why would I write about it lol. I think I should start writing about topics where I can use a variety of different vocabulary. You know, like clothes, work, and all that stuff. Let's try it.
JJOA's Clothes Election! Let's Talk About Outfits!
I usually use a T-shirt, jeans and the same pair of tennis.
Done. Now what? Oh! Did you know? I bought an Evangelion T-shirt a few months ago. It's pink and has a design of Rei Ayanami in the middle, it's dope, bro. I use it a lot, I know anime clothes are not the best seen, but I like it so everyone can cry about it. I came back to Evangelion again, but at least I'm following a third of this post's title now. I start clases again in two days, this Monday, but I don't think I'll be going, I'll go this Tuesday. I'll miss a lot of important info about the project we have to show to graduate from high school but at least I'll be chilling on my bed while my friends are in school.
I don't wanna bother y'all with that, so let's move on. Now that I think about it, how old is the average Journaly user? I've seen a lot of people with kids, jobs, and all that independent adult stuff, while I'm sad because I have to attend school again. It makes me feel like a NEET fucking weeb without a purpose. Well, that's a high schooler for you (of course there are successful high schoolers out there, don't take me seriously). Life is good till now though, I'm watching Gintama, I just started the Ghost Stories dub (which by the way y'all should watch), and sometimes a play video games! I hope everything will be the same in university lol.
But the ghost stories dub, bro. Let me make y'all a quick summary of the situation. An animation company made a children focused anime, but it didn't sell well in Japan so their last opportunity to recover some of the invested money was to have good numbers in the Western. So they told an English dub company, "You can do whatever you want with this anime, but please make it sell." And they took seriously the "whatever you want."
The subbed and dubbed are so unrelated that you could say they are different stories. The dubbed is focused on an adult audience, they added a lot of adult jokes and changed the children's personality. I really liked it, y'all should give it a try.
I think tomorrow I'll be finishing Neon Genesis Evangelion, this will be my third time. The first time I watched it I was alone, the second time I was talking with an online friend so I didn't actually pay any attention and this time I'm with my sleepy dad. I'm in the chapter where a random child arrives, and it turns out he can synchronize perfectly with a clon with robotic armor of the first fallen angel, later it seems he loves the main character, afterwards it's revealed that he was the last angel and he was going to destroy humanity, so the main character kills him.
I wanted to make this explanation confusing for a reader who hasn't watched Evangelion, but I wanted to write it grammatically correct, not sure if I succeeded though.
I think this is enough text for today's post, but I'll make sure just in case by using this last paragraph as filler. I'll just write about something unimportant enough to last only one paragraph but interesting enough to maintain the reader's interest. Assuming there's an actual reader of course. If there is someone reading this thank you very much for reading until this point and if there's noone here then I'm just waiting my time lol. So... What could be an engaging semi last filler paragraph? No fucking idea.
That was today's post, thanks for correcting and see y'all tomorrow!
I'll make only general corrections for this post. Unless you request for more, which is totally ok.
What do you mean by general corrections? If you could, I'd appreciate a correction of every mistake please! Thanks for reading and correcting!
The main two consistent errors I found were errors with run-on sentences and not inserting commas when they're needed. I will try to look for resources that explain when a sentence is too long because I don't quite know how to explain it.
I didn't know there was a rule about sentence's length! I'll search it. Thanks!
There's no rule. It is just whatever you can get away with.
As a comparison, think about how some people can talk for hours and everyone pays attention no matter how long they continue. Other people, if they don't stop every few minutes to see if people are paying attention, and if they don't check in on how people are doing, and if they don't let other people participate, will just bore everyone. They will be hogging the conversation.
So writing long sentences can be similar to talking for a long time without giving your reader a break to gather themselves and think about what you said and reflect on it.
Some people can get away with writing very long sentences (and very long paragraphs). However that is an art to it that is not normal for most people. For most people, the shorter, the better. But it is all a matter of style. Compare Hemingway with Faulkner. There is no rule, it just depends whether your style is good enough to keep people interested.
Your stories have very good style, and usually you have tangents all through the thoughts, which act as a way for people to pause and understand the smaller pieces and to be constantly amused - such as when you mention your sleepy dad, which reminds the reader of the time you wrote about how your dad always falls asleep during anime even if a girl is being blown up -- so these breaks are like short sentences that allow us to pause and think about little things along the way so we don't get bored. So you are doing fine, don't worry too much about whether the sentences need to be short or not, just worry about whether you are giving people enough places to pause and digest what you are saying.
There is no rule about the number of words per sentence, but putting more than one independent clause into one sentence without proper punctuation is incorrect. That was the issue that I was pointing out.