Today I try my tutor strategy again. This time my topic is my favourite meal. I write first, then put in document, read aloud, play audio, listen carefully. I find mistakes, fix words, change sentences, try new style.

First attempt:My favourite meal is fried rice. I like it because it very tasty and easy make. I put egg, vegetables, little meat. I mix everything, add soy sauce. I feel happy when I eat it. Sometimes I try make new recipe, add more vegetable or spice. I like share with family and friends.

Revised attempt:My favourite meal is fried rice. I like it because it is very tasty and easy to make. I put egg, vegetables, and a little meat. I mix everything and add soy sauce. I feel happy when I eat it. Sometimes I try a new recipe and add more vegetables or spices. I like to share it with family and friends.

Second attempt / different style:Fried rice is my favourite! Very tasty and easy. I put egg, veggie, little meat. Mix, add soy sauce. Eat, feel happy. Sometimes I try new recipe, more veggie, more spice. Share with family and friends. I feel strategy works very well. I notice mistakes myself and can fix. I try more every day.