Hi everyone! I'm preparing for the C1 Cambridge exam, so I'm practicing writing. I would like you to assess this post, please. The exercise is to write a report in 220-260 words;

"Numbers of foreign students attending a language school in your town have been falling recently and a governors' committee has been established to increase future numbers.

The school principal has asked you to write a report for this committee on the current situation and to recommend how more students could be attracted to the school. Your report should address the following:

- What attracts foreigners to your town.

- New teaching methods and facilities that could be offered.

- How leisure facilities and opportunities for socialising could be improved."

This is what I've written. I'd appreciate your feedback and corrections. Thank you :) (EVERYTHING FICTIONAL).

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Introduction.

The aim of this report is to comment on different alternatives to attract more students to spend one year learning Spanish in our local language school. Since a notable decrease in the number of foreign students has becoming more evident than ever before. 

Appealling atractions.

The school social media accounts clearly demostrate what things former students found more interesting during their time in our town.

First of all, they often highlight the great number of young people that live here, who, at the same time, manifest joy when their are asked about the foreign students that come here every year.

In addition, most of the students find amusing and interesting the wide variety of celebrations and traditional fest that regularly take place in our town.

Avoiding old-school methodology.

I would like to suggest that implement new ways of teaching is key to keep improving our school. For instance, weekly virtual meeting face-to-face with a tutor could be very useful to be aware of each student goals and aspirations with the language.

Furthermore, I would recommend to create new spaces in the school beyond regular classrooms. Those places will offer the students the opportunity to “live the language” in a more natural way. 

Conclusion

In summary, I highly recommend the school to focus on providing the students with the best tools to immerse themselves into the local culture, as well as to encourage them to join the school. I am sure they will never regret coming to our town.

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