Hi, everyone! I hope you are all well. It's been a minute since I last posted.

Today I come to ask for you help. I'm using a website called Write & Imrove to practice my writing skills. I did a task and it says it's level B1. I was hoping you could help me understand how it would sound more natural. Here it is:

"The bell rang at the end of the school day. She could finally go home and start preparing for the holidays. After many years of insisting, her family listened to her. They were going to London!

She was very excited since it was the first time she was travelling abroad. There were so many places to visit in so little time. She wanted to visit the London Eye and the Big Ben, but most of all, she wanted to go to The National Gallery, she was told there were many famous paintings, from Da Vinci, Van Gogh and other very talented artists. She couldn't wait!"

Thank you so much for your help :)